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yuppivore
05-21-2004, 10:30 PM
ive been mugged, clubbed, shot at, stabbed
hit by cars, fought in bars caught and trapped
ive taken drugs, ive chilled wit thugs, and ive fucked models
ive had a crowd, ive cried aloud and ive done things that were horrible
yeah ive shot many guns an ive shotgunned many buds
in fact ive smoked so much some say im losing touch
ive thrashed cars, crashed bikes, riden trains and felt insane
ive kicked ass, punched glass, and even squeezed a brain
ive fallen off buildings, kicked the shit thru children,
broken many windows and fallen in love like millions
but ive been concussed many times and lived a life thru crime
had friends betray me, try and slay me and ive even played with knives
had a shattered childhood, lived in foreign neighbourhoods
where violence and pain arent bad nah theyre good.
so considering the life ive led, where i was never hand fed
instead i ate the hand with bread, see the pain and death i dont dread
in fact theyve been by my side, n inside the whole time,
my friendship with death n pain is an old tie
--coz im waiting to die----

i ride my motobike knowing i dont like death i just wanna rest with the best
relieve stress and abolish all the tough tests unless i feel depressed in which case you'll find my vest

splashed out, my broke mouth filling with blood
i laugh out loud an grin like i seen an old bud,
im not afraid of death, no: Fuck You God!
you fucken soft cock, im gonna rot an then go off

yuppivore
06-01-2004, 07:38 PM
yeah this place is going off! bounce bounce bounce, we pumpin!

|ILLusionZ|
06-20-2004, 08:24 PM
Lol man, not many people give feedback it seems.

Alright, emotional work, I felt that. If all true, sounds like you lived through alot, power to you. The flow was very plain but carefully wrote. Im not telling you to change your whole style, but use more technical words and rhyme more often. Rhyme scheme was simple, perhaps thats all you wanted. But work on use of words and rhyme more. Good spit from the heart if all true, practice, nice work, much love | ILLusionZ | Yup Yup :wink:

yuppivore
07-17-2004, 12:12 AM
cheers for the feedback
preciate it

RapOverLord
07-17-2004, 11:24 AM
yupp,s'n'd broke up two weeks ago,so take it out of ya sig.

yuppivore
07-24-2004, 02:27 AM
shows how often i come on, hey...

Germocide
08-26-2004, 01:33 AM
count how many times you said " ive" in your free.........