independent

[1baddestBiatchx1]

Bein independent is how i need to roll,
i cant afford to hit anotha pole.
i need to love me,
b4 i decide to love him n let it be.
even tho i miss his soft kisses n the way he had wit his words,
i need to let my self be free and sail wit the birds.
there will always be a place for him in my heart,
even tho our break up split us very far apart.
we both need our time,
even tho i want him so badly to be mine.
hes special to me,
i jus wish before that he cuold see.
i miss him deeply,
i jus wish he could have felt the same,
that is y im not caliln out his name.
i need time for my sef now,
alot of ppl look at me and say wow.
im proud to say im happy w/o him,
the lights finally r not so dim.
later in life we may be 2gether,
but right now its me, thats the right weather.
im independent n free,
right now i believe thats the way it should be.

thats jus a lil sumthin i wrote wen after a break up n a f*** up....but im out
peace

[lyricalprovider]

im feelin the lyrics and they tight. i can really relate to them and i do know how u feelin do what u do gurl aight

[-LadySage-]

personally i like pieces that are more complex, you kept it simple, but that was cool, you got the point across and sum feeling along with it, this piece was koo, i think word usage and vocab coulda been upped a lil, but keep elevatin ma
i kno how niggas get sumtimes, itll be iight

[Divine Write]

nice poem/ a simple one but it was an emtional one/ i can tell it was from the heart/ it could of been better/ the more you write the better you will get/ so as you progress you should try and put much more descpriptive words in thier/ you should try and ,make the person reading it feel as if they lived it themselves/

[Rocco Malice]

Nice

Thats a cool rhyme wit a lot of emotion behind it girl, it wos a bit erratic but that was because of the feelings behind it. Keep up the good work girl.
Much love From Da Malice

[shynee_ma]

I feel you ma! I've been through it before...So don't feel alone, it's some hard ish to go through, but at least from your poem, you survived. Keep writing, you have a cute style in writing.

MyZ Nikki

LinkZ
http://www.rapdogs.com/message-board-forum/posting.php?mode=reply&t=2082
http://www.rapdogs.com/message-board-forum/viewtopic.php?t=2472

[scrapa]

simplicity/ to the point/ a lot of feelings and emotions/ a good poem with a good meaning nice drop keep'em comin

[PLAYBOYBLAZE]

nice lines girl....i could tell that came straight from the heart and thats the way its suppose to be....good work hope u come back to throw more.....