A WORLD APART

[Divine Write]

A WORLD APART

Though this distance in not the world
it midus well be
It feels like the stars and the moon is between us
when your not here with me
I have yet to hold you or to touch your skin
nor have I been able to kiss your lips
I havn't felt your hand within mine
and this damn distance is the reason for all of this
Dispite the many miles that separates us
we are ment to be
Being on opposite coast doesn't change the fact
that I love you and you love me
It does seem as if the universe is against us
like us being with each other is wrong
but they'll never succeed in thier attempts
because our love is much to strong
Try as they might
They'll NEVER make a mark
because not evan the world
can keep us apart


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[Rocco Malice]

Very nice but abit 2 sweet for me, sounds tight and descriptive and i can tell you put time into writting it. I like the theme and the message but as i said where im from you cant be too sweet or these girls will take the piss out you. that said you could probley melt a girls hart wit that.

Peace.

[shynee_ma]

:? That was so romantic. I was feelin the poem. I mean, whoever you wrote that for had to have cried or wanted to be closer to you. That's how I would have reacted, but that's a really good poem, and I really love reading your work!

MyZ Nikki


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[FlawlesS]

i feel u divine..

ive gone thru that same exact thing..being 'a world apart' between a girl that i really care about..so i hear u loud and clear...it brought back some feelings that i thought were long gone..

nice poem

peace