Muh Heartz Still Wit U

[shynee_ma]

It feels like the end,
Of all that was right,
I still dream of you,
Holding me tight,

The night creeps on,
The days pass by,
When I think of losing you,
All I do is cry,

My heart is broken,
But it's still with you,
Life is so impossible,
I don't know what to do,

It may be short term to some,
Or not deep enough,
But the things I've been through,
Is just so tough,

My hearts still with you,
Forever until I die,
My life will be complete,
When it's just you and I.

MyZ Nikki
((((Original Work))))
((((On Tha Spot))))

LinkZ
http://www.rapdogs.com/message-board-forum/posting.php?mode=reply&t=2082
http://www.rapdogs.com/message-board-forum/viewtopic.php?t=2472

[Rocco Malice]

Nice, pretty standard but nice. If you make it more symbolic with a few metaphors it would be deeper cos at the momment it sounds like a chours to a song or sumting. But wot do i know im a ghetto poet so the love tings not really me. Do your thing, keep writtin you got talent.

[FlawlesS]

i agree with rocco...it is a sort of basic..but u definetly do get ur message across...and there is definite potential and room for growth...so jus keep doin ya thing

peace

[Divine Write]

hey girl on your site I saw a lot better ones then this/ you should of took your best one from that site and put it here/

I liked it/ I like the message you conveyed/ come on ma throw up some more and show them what you can do/

[PLAYBOYBLAZE]

i agree, it was somewhat simple, but thats okay....u did get your point across and u did do it right from your heart...good job girl....i like your style.....