My people

[DeadlyAssassin]

Aye yo Check this

This is a poem to all the people I love, cause ya "My People"/
Ya been through the bad and good times, cause ya "My People"/
Ya are always there for a shoulder to be leaned on, or a sleeve to wipe a tear/
My love for ya shines through anythin and everythin, even through fear/
Wit out ya "My people", I dunno where I be at/
But since ya are here, I kno we shit the "Cause I be that"/
The jokes we say, the games we play, is all in Love/
No matta how hard you act, even thugs needs a hug/
So where ever I go, ya still gonna stay "My People"/
So even if I am long gone, or one of ya is gone, ya still "My People"/

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[FlawlesS]

that wasnt bad deadly ...the only thing i kind of have a problem with is....that u should put more metaphors, similies, and shit like that in there..mix it all up and u could have some dope shit
but it was aiight overall

[Rocco Malice]

I see where you wanted to take that but it seemed likr it could have had more definintion to make it deeper cos at the momment it sounds like a rap, but you got the skills so jus fine tune it nxt time.

Peace

[PLAYBOYBLAZE]

I like that DA. I agree with the two above, but, on the otherhand I also know there's a million ways to write a poem, maybe u think its perfect just like that, cool....keep writing I want to see more....

-peace