A scent of heaven [Archive]

PLAYBOYBLAZE

10-19-2003, 11:06 PM

When the window opened, a world entered with
the wind, oh window where have all these
scents been? The smell of melon first
enters the room, then it was followed by
daisy probably the ones that just bloomed.
Gradually becoming accustomed to
the aroma all about, but when the breeze
started to increase there was a fragrance to
seek out. The smell was familiar so I ran
to the window and peered outside, driven by
the exquisite smile on her face that
fragrance was my beautiful bride.

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Endo Jay

10-25-2003, 01:34 PM

Dag, dawg - You hot on a couple diff levels.. I don't normally post poetry of even read the stuff.. jus a lil too slow, but I like ya style... You a sick battle emcee too..

~Lady N~

10-27-2003, 10:19 PM

On some real ish, i really liked it alot. I wish it coulda been longer cause i was feelin it that much. Keep up on wat u doin and much luv to u

Domestik

11-01-2003, 06:03 PM

Nice work. Just that 1st "Shakespearian" part was chessy.

When the window opened, a world entered with
the wind, oh window where have all these
scents been?

PLAYBOYBLAZE

11-02-2003, 12:09 PM

thanks for the feedback...n yea...i guess it could b cheezy to some
...just like ur sig...but each one teach one

-peace

Domestik

11-03-2003, 02:42 PM

Insulting my sig is as meaningless as my sig itself.

*EDIT*-Next time just accept the constructive criticism.

PLAYBOYBLAZE

11-03-2003, 03:04 PM

thanks for the feedback...

I call that taking criticism...however

what you said is more like destructive criticism, callin
somebodys lines cheezy doesnt get respect in my forum...
maybe sayin u just didnt like the first part, or it didnt go
together, that would get respect. that was a lil more word
play than u can probably handle thats all....ex. wind, oh window

next time take heed to different styles displayed in this forum.....

Domestik

11-03-2003, 04:58 PM

Are you always that senstive PB?

PLAYBOYBLAZE

11-03-2003, 05:00 PM

I dont let kids disrespect my work, plain and simple..
..so yea, I guess I am...are you as much of a p.rick as they
say you are?

Simba..

11-03-2003, 05:10 PM

I felt you on that poem PB shyt is hot

Domestik

11-04-2003, 03:04 PM

I actually far from being a kid for 1. 2, I wasn't disrespecting your work and that's what I've been tryign to stress to you. It was just constructive criticism.