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PLAYBOYBLAZE
10-21-2003, 12:52 AM
Towering above the sky, the lighthouse that
has once strived to keep the ships on course
is now decommissioned. The surface shows
white paint peeled back resembling a
decomposed log that has been eaten from the
sun. Above, fractured glass windows
surround the once guiding light. The
beveled shaped walls portray parallel lines
that have random patterns of chipped away
wood. At the foot of the tower, enormous
aged boulders form a horseshoe setting the
tower adjacent with the rough waters. At
one time many captains have depended upon
this lighthouse for direction. Though it no
longer holds a purpose, it still defends its
reputation on our coastline.


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FlawlesS
10-24-2003, 06:27 AM
son...maaad descriptive...good shit..feelin it dog, forreal..
really nice use of vocabulary

~Lady N~
11-02-2003, 10:48 PM
Just like flawless said, it was very descriptive. i was feelin how it's different from other poems in that you really have to think while you readin it. I love your poetry, so stay up and of course, Much love to You. :D