Immortal Divinity[2] vs. Obnoxious[2]::Vote Up-No Newb Votes

[(x [____] %)DiViNe BuDhiZ]

10 Bars
3 Days after check.
House Rules
Vet votes preferred (yes help me out with a bar by bar)

Checkin' in.

[obnoxious]

check.


yeppie @ 10 bars.

[(x [____] %)DiViNe BuDhiZ]

:lol: I'll key something quick right now. Or whenever I can balance the time :)

[(x [____] %)DiViNe BuDhiZ]

Guess I'll Key Up First-------------------------------------->>:lol:

Err-uhm 10 Bars, this is my second one. Your a vet but I ain't scared I eat Cat doctors for breakfast! Get it!
__________________________________________________ __________

Think You Good?
1-5 On 1? Your Just-A-Bluff! You Ain't Drawin' 'Winning Hands' If You Lined Up A {Royal Family}
Your Rhymes Are 'Filled With More Shit' Than {Con-Text} In Messages That's Spammin-Me!

Cool You Down!
2-If You The Fireman! I'm The Drought! Ob's Flow Supply Will Be Slow!
Chop His Legs Off-Leave Obnoxious Like A Midget On Wreckord::Jus Cee-Lo!!

Multie Killer?
3-Only Thing Ob's Good For Is 'Stretching Lines' To Give 'No-Sense' Like Lyin' To Donate
Like Ripping The Alphabet! I'll Leave O 'Beat' 'N Biting The Curb In A {ProStrate}!

Get Cover!
4-Step Back! You Missed-Step!!! Suggest 'Duckin Bars' To Avoid {Brews}
O B Knocked Out! By A 'Drunkin' Fist!! Spinnin' In Circles Like {Boarders} Do!

'Bury' You Like Underground Artists!
5-Well Done! Ob Be Baked On {A-Rival} Like Breeding 2 'Sexes' How He {Enter-Bread}
Plus! Dude's Not Potent In 'Text'! He'll Be Under Grounds Like {Grafh-ite} The Pencil Lead!

Weak As Hell!
6-I'll Crack Your Bars Like Products Made From Steel Were Soft Like Twigs
'Knockin' Off More Than 'Hair Replacements'--I'll Leave Ob's Head Following The Wig!

Name Plays? Pfft
7-Don't Let Name Changes Full You! I'll Rip You A New Ass-Hole On Both Accounts!
Your Rhymes'll Be Like Tramp-o-Line, Gas For Hoes! Leave This Pimp A Real Limp! On The Crown!

'Pull You Out Your Game'
8-Tearin' Up Ligaments Like Paper I'll Leave OB-LIQUE/LEAK Like The Side Of His Tore-So...
His Text {Be Foreign} The Ones After'{Diss} Will Have Less Impact Like New Inventions Of The Morse-Code!

Pussy!
9-Immortal Smash {Stones} On Bones And {Kid'Knees} Ain't Safe Either!
You're Rhymes 'Weak'! I'll Slip This "Fist-in" In Both Sets Of Your Lips And Leave Ob {Tighter}!!!!

Done Deal!
10-Fuck Ten Bars! 'Count Your Strikes' You'll Be Gone In 'Three' To Leave You 'Buried' Like Roots Of A Tree
'F.a.g' Battle Me? With Gay Pride Tees! Ob'll Be {Bearing Straight} The Way He'll Be Standin' Under {Seas!/Sieze}
__________________________________________________ __________

Explanations:

Bar 1 - Self explanatory
Bar 2 - ever seen Cee-Lo? A Soul Machine On Record That's Short!
Bar 3 - {Prostrate - render helpless or defenseless}
Bar 4 - Bruise, Brew, Drunken Fist, Skateboarders! Get It!
Bar 5 - {Interbred, Grafh underground rapper, Graphite is not poisionous Smile}
Bar 6 - Self explanatory
Bar 7 - I'm Dipset as well.
Bar 8 - {Be Foreign=Before And}, Morse Code, not a big impact on Tech now}
Bar 9 - Hate sexual references but this was alright - {Kidney Stones} {2 Sets Of Lips} Some Tight Pussy
Bar 10 - Bering Straight, a body of water like a Sea. :roll:
__________________________________________________ ___________

Quick 30-Min Drop. Your turn! :wink:

[obnoxious]

Tiscali is being a complete homosexual. It's broadband and taking me 10 minutes to refresh a page! ::foams at the mouth:: Smh. Sorry kid but I'm going to have to beat you badly, just because it took so damn long to load each page.

So I'll title this: "Have you lost your damn mind?"

cuz check it


I'm the fierest, man! type to battle a T-Rex and still make it, just to wave and sign boobies for my bestest Fan!
Behead You, Man! Pull the Sword Out & AIM AT ID AT THE EYES, but no it aint a BIOMETRIC SCAN :shock:

Lavish in brawl, 90% of the brain required ! ::show of hands:: who thinks I'm Having to Stall?
Loss'll Catch Him So Unawares, Immortal wont know “what Todo” even when told it's the Spanish For All :shock:

the whole world fucking knows ya fucked spitting that played shit against my flawless coke
Rip You and Leave You As Just A Ho? I call this Cosmos my bitch so O'll “wink at the Galaxy” more than A Working Hubble Telescope

at ease, iteratively bombing this sucker! outclass, and belittle every concept you cover
Erase him with One Bar, then Start with “Divinity Over, See” Brainiacs Make The Link To Jesus Walking On Water :wink:

so cold, you'll observe his face tear the glove, comebacks you couldn't understand as Noah's wave sent the dove
Open ya Grave, Immortals Shot in the Earth, BAM, Synonymous with the Setting for Shakespeare in Love

Cupid, The Globe
http://www.shakespeares-globe.org/
http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0138097/
Smh, Get it?

You're seeing leadership, refusal to cut up syllables and mispronounce when I'm killing lyricists
Kid, This Shit's like Hanging - I'll Rip Ya Heart Out & Eat It in Front of You - “Chilling, Isn't It?”

the hardest, of course, the reason you love text, give You direction in hurt more than magnets with sores
Leave In You In Reality Haunted with Death, You'll Even See "The Sungo Read", but I'm not comparing opened emails to African Gods

I was meant to bless ya, Homeboy'll traumatized with his jaw unlocked just like a peerless tenor
no way I'll understand this insolence, the UZI'll "Stick ID in the Mouth" worse than Faking Dental Records

How bad do you suck? Got ripped and I didn't use set ups, my rushed keys sick nuff to macerate ya feelings
this Daft kid searching for help, but Against O, it'll only Fall on Deaf Ears like crowd surfing in disabled meetings

this bitch ass aint stopping me, this retard's been Ko'd by every whack thats lost to me
Knocked Out, From UPPERCUTS So Assuredly! You can Find Immortal in Orbit - The Slow ones asking what Roman Mythology !

[Muphaser]

Flow-ID
Multies TIE
wp OB
Punches OB I Like how you toned it down a bit, but some of its FAR TOO complicated to be strong... ID you had some nice concepts, others were a bit weak... im giving this a tie
Complexity - OB
Personals - ID

OA - wow looks like this is a TIE on my part

Nice looking guys


EDIT to include some best / worst line scenarios:


ID

Multie Killer?
3-Only Thing Ob's Good For Is 'Stretching Lines' To Give 'No-Sense' Like Lyin' To Donate
Like Ripping The Alphabet! I'll Leave O 'Beat' 'N Biting The Curb In A {ProStrate}!

Nice personal - punch not so



Weak As Hell!
6-I'll Crack Your Bars Like Products Made From Steel Were Soft Like Twigs
'Knockin' Off More Than 'Hair Replacements'--I'll Leave Ob's Head Following The Wig!

Simple liking it



4-Step Back! You Missed-Step!!! Suggest 'Duckin Bars' To Avoid {Brews}


^ Nice WP

OB

You're seeing leadership, refusal to cut up syllables and mispronounce when I'm killing lyricists
Kid, This Shit's like Hanging - I'll Rip Ya Heart Out & Eat It in Front of You - “Chilling, Isn't It?”

Ouch VERY HARSH - horrorcore right there :P



How bad do you suck? Got ripped and I didn't use set ups, my rushed keys sick nuff to macerate ya feelings
this Daft kid searching for help, but Against O, it'll only Fall on Deaf Ears like crowd surfing in disabled meetings

^^ Nice meta

[(x [____] %)DiViNe BuDhiZ]

Thanks for voting. Can we ge some more votes. 1-1 tie

[(x [____] %)DiViNe BuDhiZ]

:mad: VOTE in this battle I'll vote in your battles. :evil:

[Simba..]

Flow: obnoxious
Multies: tie
World Play: Immortal Divinity (You don't have to explain yourself..)
Punche: Immotral Divinity
Complexity - obnoxious
Personals - neither

-Immortal Divinity

[(x [____] %)DiViNe BuDhiZ]

2-1 Up.

[Merkleman]

Flow - ID i thought yours OB was a bit off
Multies - Tie
Punches - OB trying a bit too hard may we say your too clever for your own good but got most of it - Tie
Creativity - OB
Metas - OB

ima go with OB i liked his verse more

How bad do you suck? Got ripped and I didn't use set ups, my rushed keys sick nuff to macerate ya feelings
this Daft kid searching for help, but Against O, it'll only Fall on Deaf Ears like crowd surfing in disabled meetings

^^^NICE I LIKED DAT ONE!

[(x [____] %)DiViNe BuDhiZ]

Appreciate the vote but you are suppose to have 300 posts to vote in here.

2-1 Up.

[obnoxious]

the joys of RD.

[>JustIN:SANE<]

Flow:ID
multies:ob
punches:tie
personals:Id
wordplay:Id (ovy)
methphors:ID

O/A vote: ID ncie drop by both but i think ID inched this one out.......keep up the GOOd WORK

[chi*vice]

Flow - ID i thought yours OB was a bit off
Multies - Tie
Punches - OB trying a bit too hard may we say your too clever for your own good but got most of it - Tie
Creativity - OB
Metas - OB

ima go with OB i liked his verse more

How bad do you suck? Got ripped and I didn't use set ups, my rushed keys sick nuff to macerate ya feelings
this Daft kid searching for help, but Against O, it'll only Fall on Deaf Ears like crowd surfing in disabled meetings

^^^NICE I LIKED DAT ONE!

co-sign ^^

2 - 2 and uppin

[(x [____] %)DiViNe BuDhiZ]

Uppin' :D

[alfa-q]

ayite recap:
muph voted tie 1-1
simba- i.d
2-1
justin- i.d
3-1
vice-ob
3-2! and uppin!
my vote:
flow -id
multiz-i.d
punchez- ob
personalz- i.d
wordplay- i.d
metaz-ob

overall- i.d takes this.
4-2 UPPIN

[obnoxious]

1.

You dont have enough posts to vote in RD3 battles.

2.

Merkleman also doesn't have enough posts.

3. Simba's vote is poorly explained. Both of us have equal number of categories


Overall I agree with 2-1.

[alfa-q]

:shock: wow u so smart! 12 posts.
watch il make it 300 dickhead.
n btw if i logd in wid ma old nick id hav alot mre. . . bout ummmm 4tyms mre then u bitch dnt fuk wit dis

[(x [____] %)DiViNe BuDhiZ]

Uh...Obnoxious What's the score. I don't feel like going into the history and counting up the score.


Muph vote count 1-1
Then Simba, he should count but if you want more explanation PM him about it. Or w/e. 2-1
Justin's vote - seems fair 3-1
Chi Vice's vote - seems fair 3-2
Alfa - I don't know. Get the post count first.

But I really want to get this battle over with. Mine as well move it to RD2 or something. This is almost DEAD.

Obnoxious if you don't agree with the voting, we'll work it out. But I agree Simba's vote could be debatable. So 2-2, Tie at the moment. 'Till you say if you really want to discount Simba's vote. I don't have a problem with it.

upping for some more votes.

[obnoxious]

simba's vote isn't really that good. it's about as good as chivice but i'm only letting chivice's count because he's a mod. So far there's been only 1 reasonable vote but my standards - and thats Muph - but 3 vaguely acceptable votes in total

including

Muph, Justin and Chivice

so 2-2.


Also the way voting is done, is you discount poorly explained votes, until they are properly explained. So Simba's wouldn't count until he explained it in greater detail. Not the otherway around.


So 2-2.

[(x [____] %)DiViNe BuDhiZ]

I feel where you coming from. This is RD3, I really expect voting to be much elevated. 'Till then I agree on the score. 2-2 as I've said. Props on this battle anyways. Nice to battle a vet.

[quiet$torm]

Flow - ID i thought yours OB was a bit off
Multies - Tie
Punches - OB trying a bit too hard may we say your too clever for your own good but got most of it - Tie
Creativity - OB
Metas - OB

ima go with OB i liked his verse more

How bad do you suck? Got ripped and I didn't use set ups, my rushed keys sick nuff to macerate ya feelings
this Daft kid searching for help, but Against O, it'll only Fall on Deaf Ears like crowd surfing in disabled meetings

^^^NICE I LIKED DAT ONE!

co-sign ^^

2 - 2 and uppin

me 2 on this 1..................

[chi*vice]

me be'n a mod dont mean shit ...

u accepting my vote since i'm a mod is not a fair vote,if thats wut u think then thats cheating so my vote doesn't count ....


Also NO1 has to explain votes(its not in the house rules), thats why peeps shit doesn't get voted on ..

2 - 1

~1~

[(x [____] %)DiViNe BuDhiZ]

Well, even if it is not in the house rules...I still don't like unexplained votes. I love feedback, it's hard to get some properly. I try to give some, at times when I feel so. But yeah, if any of us wanting to get better or know what's up, we all prefer explained votes. Still...

[chi*vice]

iight thats koo,i feel you...

my vote doesn't count,still...

[B.N.G]

ayite recap:
muph voted tie 1-1
simba- i.d
2-1
justin- i.d
3-1
vice-ob
3-2! and uppin!
my vote:
flow -id
multiz-i.d
punchez- ob
personalz- i.d
wordplay- i.d
metaz-ob

overall- i.d takes this.
4-2 UPPIN
i'm with this guy

[obnoxious]

Smh, do these people read the rules? It's almost like 2004 again, with unknowns dropping whack votes all over the place. Immortal can you put in capital letters in the title - No newbies posting or voting.

[(x [____] %)DiViNe BuDhiZ]

:D Word. Will do. Uppin' for votes. :D

[[King_Mc]]

flow...TIE
multies...O
punches...O
personals...ID
wordplay...TIE
metaz...O
creativity...O
enjoyment...ID
opener...ID
closer...O

.:OVERALL:. Ob took it by a lil bit, good battle tho.. this could be moved to rd2 for more voting..

[GTech]

Flow: ID (more organized)
Multis: I didn’t see much
Punches: Both were evened out… some were off, but both had tha same consistency
Creativity: Both seemed original… most ov tha times
Personals: Ob
Enjoyment: both

O/A VOTE: IMMORTAL DIVINITY

[Trigo]

thats one of the wierdest votes i'v seen so far here on RD

[obnoxious]

You don't know the half of it. This is the wierdest 3rd battle I have had all year.

[GTech]

thats one of the wierdest votes i'v seen so far here on RD

question mark

[Trigo]

Flow: ID (more organized)
Multis: I didn’t see much
Punches: Both were evened out… some were off, but both had tha same consistency
Creativity: Both seemed original… most ov tha times
Personals: Ob
Enjoyment: both

O/A VOTE: IMMORTAL DIVINITY


how does immortal get this vote? i mean, i dont understand, only cat he got was flow... OB got personals... the rest is a tie.... and u give IM the vote?

WIERD!

[GTech]

Flow: ID (more organized)
Multis: I didn’t see much
Punches: Both were evened out… some were off, but both had tha same consistency
Creativity: Both seemed original… most ov tha times
Personals: Ob
Enjoyment: both

O/A VOTE: IMMORTAL DIVINITY

i see it now.. i must of left out "Enjoyment" out for Ob.. my bad

i guess i declare this a TIE

[(x [____] %)DiViNe BuDhiZ]

I'm totally lost... :?

[Trigo]

Flow: ID (more organized)
Multis: I didn’t see much
Punches: Both were evened out… some were off, but both had tha same consistency
Creativity: Both seemed original… most ov tha times
Personals: Ob
Enjoyment: both

O/A VOTE: IMMORTAL DIVINITY

i see it now.. i must of left out "Enjoyment" out for Ob.. my bad

i guess i declare this a TIE

this totally makes no sense

[GTech]

.........................

ok, exclude my vote, or give da votes to each cuz my cats were "tied".. i couldn't pick a winner...


please tell me that makes sense

[[Neurologik]]

Ok


Flow: ID
Multies: TIE
Punches: ID
Personals: OB
Wordplay: OB
Enjoyment: ID

O/A: Its gota go to ID, he jus put that lil bit more into it


But my favourite bar outta boh verses was

You're seeing leadership, refusal to cut up syllables and mispronounce when I'm killing lyricists
Kid, This Shit's like Hanging - I'll Rip Ya Heart Out & Eat It in Front of You - “Chilling, Isn't It?”


That was sick :D

[obnoxious]

The thread title & rules says "no newbs"

http://rapdogs.com/message-board-forum/viewtopic.php?t=42828&start=0

You happen to be a complete newb.

justinsane is also a complete newb.

http://rapdogs.com/message-board-forum/viewtopic.php?p=352940#352940

but since he voted before immortaldivinity changed the title, I'll allow his vote as a consolation.

so Overall, 2-2.

So far, I am actually stunned at how terrible the voting has been, considering this is supposed to be Rd3. It suggests that because the vets have been inactive, the newbs have lacked guidance.

[[Neurologik]]

erm.. yeah

[EmceeSmythe]

the joys of RD.

Oh man Ob... I feel sorry for you on this battle... Lemme drop an example of a VET VOTE for all of RD3...

Pay attention... All of ya'll should be dropping votes like this.

Immortal Divinity first...


1-5 On 1? Your Just-A-Bluff! You Ain't Drawin' 'Winning Hands' If You Lined Up A {Royal Family}
Your Rhymes Are 'Filled With More Shit' Than {Con-Text} In Messages That's Spammin-Me!

^^... First of all drop the numbering bars thing... Espescially on a bar where it starts with a number, my brain automatically thinks "1 to 5 on 1" when I read that first part. It doesn't add anything... nix it. Same with the labels before each bar... and the brackets are distracting too.

As for the actual bar, no real big punch. Are you calling his rhymes spam? Cause if so, that's a decent concept that you coulda connected it way better... Like "Filled with so much shit, my virus scanner spam blocks them" or something. And the con-text wordplay's been played out since text rap started.


If You The Fireman! I'm The Drought! Ob's Flow Supply Will Be Slow!
Chop His Legs Off-Leave Obnoxious Like A Midget On Wreckord::Jus Cee-Lo!!

^^... First bar is an interesting metaphor, I like that. But the second one is kinda plain... Once again a good concept but you aren't tying it in with good enough connections. If you wanna make it a hard-hitting punch you've gotta build it up more than just saying you'll make him a midget.


Only Thing Ob's Good For Is 'Stretching Lines' To Give 'No-Sense' Like Lyin' To Donate
Like Ripping The Alphabet! I'll Leave O 'Beat' 'N Biting The Curb In A {ProStrate}!

^^... Donate and prostrate are pronounced differently... Prostrate is like prawstrate... I can't stress this enough amongst RapDogs MCs... only use words you know and can prononce... Moving on...
The lying to donate thing is what I call an empty metaphor... There's no point to it, it doesn't relate to anything except the words before it, you just did it to create a multi... This is newbie behavior that should be avoided. As for your punch, it's basically just saying you'll curb him and he's helpless... Woulda been better to just say it, and even that woulda sucked.


Step Back! You Missed-Step!!! Suggest 'Duckin Bars' To Avoid {Brews}
O B Knocked Out! By A 'Drunkin' Fist!! Spinnin' In Circles Like {Boarders}
Do!

^^... Missed step? Misstep? Are you attempting a WP? Cause that basically means the same thing... :? The bars/alchohol play is so old I'm gonna burn down a building if I have to read it again. I just plain don't get the skateboarders punchline... Either we have totally different ideas of what a skateboarder is or one of us is missing something. I'm pretty good at catching punchlines so I'm kinda leaning towards it being a no-connection punch.


Well Done! Ob Be Baked On {A-Rival} Like Breeding 2 'Sexes' How He {Enter-Bread}
Plus! Dude's Not Potent In 'Text'! He'll Be Under Grounds Like {Grafh-ite} The Pencil Lead!

^^... Did you connect rival with anything? WPs that don't connect are just distracting. I get the enter-bread WP (which is kinda forced) but I don't get what Enter Bread means by itself? And tying in text with pencil lead isn't that dope... And you don't tie in Grafh-ite with anything. You can't just leave a syllable hanging on a WP, ya know? As for leaving him under ground... Not a big punch... :?


I'll Crack Your Bars Like Products Made From Steel Were Soft Like Twigs
'Knockin' Off More Than 'Hair Replacements'--I'll Leave Ob's Head Following The Wig!

^^... The first line is kinda bogus... An odd, soft simile. It's just filler. Second is kinda blah... Decapitation? Gotta get more creative... You connected it though within the punch so that's good.


Don't Let Name Changes Full You! I'll Rip You A New Ass-Hole On Both Accounts!
Your Rhymes'll Be Like Tramp-o-Line, Gas For Hoes! Leave This Pimp A Real Limp! On The Crown!


^^... Okay, first line talkin' about yourself... Not really useful in a battle. Are you saying you're going to hit him on the head? If somebody like me doesn't understand your bar it's a problem... You gotta either connect it or make the connection more obvious.


Tearin' Up Ligaments Like Paper I'll Leave OB-LIQUE/LEAK Like The Side Of His Tore-So...
His Text {Be Foreign} The Ones After'{Diss} Will Have Less Impact Like New Inventions Of The Morse-Code!

^^... First bar is pretty good WP on Tore-So, but you don't make a connection with oblique... Before and after is good but you don't really connect foreign with anything. And Morse Code punch is worthless... Connects to nothing, isn't a hard punch, and is just plain weird.


Immortal Smash {Stones} On Bones And {Kid'Knees} Ain't Safe Either!
You're Rhymes 'Weak'! I'll Slip This "Fist-in" In Both Sets Of Your Lips And Leave Ob {Tighter}!!!!

^^... Okay, Kid knees is okay, the sones connection is a good concept but you aren't tying it in at all. And I don't see how punching a vagina is gonna make it tighter... Besides... You aren't trying to make your opponent look tight... This is a battle... And that wasn't a good punch.


Fuck Ten Bars! 'Count Your Strikes' You'll Be Gone In 'Three' To Leave You 'Buried' Like Roots Of A Tree
'F.a.g' Battle Me? With Gay Pride Tees! Ob'll Be {Bearing Straight} The Way He'll Be Standin' Under {Seas!/Sieze}

^^... Okay, first one is mediocre, not really much going on except a numbers play. Buried like roots of a tree? Blah... I get the straight/gay thing, bearing was a good play... But seas/sieze was not really a good punch... No real connection.

Overall... I talked enough about your punches and WP and metaphors... They were lacking. Your flow was off and disjointed, cause you stretched your bars a ton.

If I seemed hard on you it's cause this is RD3... And this is how votes should be. No hate, just trying to be constructive.



Obnoxious now...

I'm the fierest, man! type to battle a T-Rex and still make it, just to wave and sign boobies for my bestest Fan!
Behead You, Man! Pull the Sword Out & AIM AT ID AT THE EYES, but no it aint a BIOMETRIC SCAN

^^... First line filler, a brag... Pointless for a battle. The punch, though, is ridiculous tight... Great metaphor.

Lavish in brawl, 90% of the brain required ! ::show of hands:: who thinks I'm Having to Stall?
Loss'll Catch Him So Unawares, Immortal wont know “what Todo” even when told it's the Spanish For All

^^... First line filler-ish but not a brag as much. Second line though... You don't pronounce todo like to do... I'm sure you know that but it kinda makes for a forced WP. And I don't exactly know why but I've been cautioned against spanglish in text... I know spanish pretty well so it doesn't bother me but some people don't like it.

the whole world fucking knows ya fucked spitting that played shit against my flawless coke
Rip You and Leave You As Just A Ho? I call this Cosmos my bitch so O'll “wink at the Galaxy” more than A Working Hubble Telescope

^^... Multi is kinda lacking in this bar for your usual stuff... Flawless coke coulda been better... Punch was kinda lacking. Connected and all, just not a great concept.

at ease, iteratively bombing this sucker! outclass, and belittle every concept you cover
Erase him with One Bar, then Start with “Divinity Over, See” Brainiacs Make The Link To Jesus Walking On Water

^^... Dope punch... Nameplay... solid.

so cold, you'll observe his face tear the glove, comebacks you couldn't understand as Noah's wave sent the dove
Open ya Grave, Immortals Shot in the Earth, BAM, Synonymous with the Setting for Shakespeare in Love

^^... Mmm... Kinda stretched concept. Okay but kinda jumbled and forced-feeling.

You're seeing leadership, refusal to cut up syllables and mispronounce when I'm killing lyricists
Kid, This Shit's like Hanging - I'll Rip Ya Heart Out & Eat It in Front of You - “Chilling, Isn't It?”

^^... I don't really dig the horrorcore stuff. I think it's kinda blah... Unless I'm missing some punch, this bar is kinda weak without a punch of WP.

the hardest, of course, the reason you love text, give You direction in hurt more than magnets with sores
Leave In You In Reality Haunted with Death, You'll Even See "The Sungo Read", but I'm not comparing opened emails to African Gods

^^... Dope WP with Sungo Read... Magnets with sores connects and sounds good but isn't really that useful in the bar.

I was meant to bless ya, Homeboy'll traumatized with his jaw unlocked just like a peerless tenor
no way I'll understand this insolence, the UZI'll "Stick ID in the Mouth" worse than Faking Dental Records

^^... Kinda sorta same WP as the bioscan thing but a different flip and still dope... Good tie-in with first line with mouth open thing.

How bad do you suck? Got ripped and I didn't use set ups, my rushed keys sick nuff to macerate ya feelings
this Daft kid searching for help, but Against O, it'll only Fall on Deaf Ears like crowd surfing in disabled meetings

^^... Had me rolling... DOPE punch and simile.

this bitch ass aint stopping me, this retard's been Ko'd by every whack thats lost to me
Knocked Out, From UPPERCUTS So Assuredly! You can Find Immortal in Orbit - The Slow ones asking what Roman Mythology !

^^... Hahaha... Good punch. Really solid metaphor... Good closer.

So let's do the cats...

Flow: Both were stretched but Obs didn't have all the decorations fucking it up, so he gets the vote in this cat.
Multis: Ob
WP: Ob
Punches: Ob
Personals: Tie (not anything great besides nameplays)

Overall Obnoxious gets my vote.

^^ Now if people could vote like that, RD3 would be KICKIN.

[(x [____] %)DiViNe BuDhiZ]

:D Finally a vet vote. Thank you man, for a breakdown too. :wink: This is how I've slowed elevating 'cuz nobody said much. But thanks much bro.

[obnoxious]

upping this disgrace of an example of RD3 voting.


3-2 me

[kingbrown]

coo battle but damn...i expect more from lev 3 voterz..what is goin on round here?!?! lolz...cosigns and what not...why write if u don't get original feed? i'd be pissed...

anywayz...u'll know how i do...I'll break it down and post later...

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[kingbrown]

Err-uhm 10 Bars, this is my second one. Your a vet but I ain't scared I eat Cat doctors for breakfast! Get it!
nah...veteran and veterenarian is too simple. sounded kinda cheezy...
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Think You Good?
1-5 On 1? Your Just-A-Bluff! You Ain't Drawin' 'Winning Hands' If You Lined Up A {Royal Family}
Your Rhymes Are 'Filled With More Shit' Than {Con-Text} In Messages That's Spammin-Me!
not feelin the first line,although i'm a die hard poker playa. the meta just wasn't setup at all...i mean, the punch fits into the line and is clean enough but the bluff part wasn't hard enough as a setup to really make this line stand out. the second line was coo tho, although con-vexed, con-test, cont-text plays are kinda used...i know i flipped convexed last year sometime...better in content tho than the first.
Cool You Down!
2-If You The Fireman! I'm The Drought! Ob's Flow Supply Will Be Slow!
Chop His Legs Off-Leave Obnoxious Like A Midget On Wreckord::Jus Cee-Lo!!
fireman/drought...a lil too simple...i do that ish sometimes too but the concept here is too basic. second was creative but not real complex. didn't need the explanation...
Multie Killer?
3-Only Thing Ob's Good For Is 'Stretching Lines' To Give 'No-Sense' Like Lyin' To Donate
Like Ripping The Alphabet! I'll Leave O 'Beat' 'N Biting The Curb In A {ProStrate}!
not into cosigns obviously, but smthye hit this one on the head i thought, and he explained it well....the sim doesn't go anywhere or really support the punch concept. as for prostrate, if u are going to use it (knowing how to say it helps of course). use it as a verb, like to prostrate. otherwise u have to describe an object, like as in an adj, of which you didn't do either. dude's right, stay away from words u don't use on the reg cuz it can make seems things seem forced. and u didn't need all that vocab to get the point across either. in content this bar was prolly one of the weakest i thought.
Get Cover!
4-Step Back! You Missed-Step!!! Suggest 'Duckin Bars' To Avoid {Brews}
O B Knocked Out! By A 'Drunkin' Fist!! Spinnin' In Circles Like {Boarders} Do!
lol@ barz...the thing is man, if u haven't been doin text for more than a few months, u could easily think that this was original. i think the way u flipped it kinda was actually..the play was on bruise more than the double meaning on bars the way i read it. just be careful with obvious concepts. if it seems str8 forward, 100 peeps prolly flipped it already, u know? i liked the first line actually, but it fell off on the second. way simple and not a strong connection between boarders and circles and bein knocked out. i do see the parallel fromt he first line tho...i like to see that ish in verses..consistency
'Bury' You Like Underground Artists!
5-Well Done! Ob Be Baked On {A-Rival} Like Breeding 2 'Sexes' How He {Enter-Bread}
Plus! Dude's Not Potent In 'Text'! He'll Be Under Grounds Like {Grafh-ite} The Pencil Lead!
whoah...way too complex with no direction here...i see the wps, but arrival and a-rival kinda left me hanging. u needed to somehow imply that u were the oven/grill or whatever to make that work. instead, it seems like u played off the baked idea to make the similie work at the end of the first line. i think that is what made it weak...i dunno. if u just stuck with arrival on that line and flipped it it would been stronger...too much goin on. and on the second, its another example of a sim that didn't go anywhere. i wanna say 'what about graphite again?'...u feel me? the ref to the rapper is too random...especially to try and tie it in with pencil lead too... the pencil lead really only has word association in this bar, other than that it just explains what graphite is used for...a lot of words without hard direct dissing... not to mention that interbred and enter bread sound different the way i say them...
Weak As Hell!
6-I'll Crack Your Bars Like Products Made From Steel Were Soft Like Twigs
'Knockin' Off More Than 'Hair Replacements'--I'll Leave Ob's Head Following The Wig!
are u sayin that ob comes with hard barz? not the hardest way to set up a punch. not feelin that line. the second was just not that hard.
Name Plays? Pfft
7-Don't Let Name Changes Full You! I'll Rip You A New Ass-Hole On Both Accounts!
Your Rhymes'll Be Like Tramp-o-Line, Gas For Hoes! Leave This Pimp A Real Limp! On The Crown!
first line was fillerish...lol@ tramp o line...never heard that before...lolz...i literally lol-ed...but what does this line mean exactly? leave ob with a limp...but on the crown? what is crown? his head? so limp means like bruise or something? what am I missing?
'Pull You Out Your Game'
8-Tearin' Up Ligaments Like Paper I'll Leave OB-LIQUE/LEAK Like The Side Of His Tore-So...
His Text {Be Foreign} The Ones After'{Diss} Will Have Less Impact Like New Inventions Of The Morse-Code!
questionable word play here...the obliques are your side muscles, right? so how can u leave side musles like the side of a torso? maybe I'm reading it wrong..if so, my bad, it is late...but u can't re-invent something, u feel me? its a poor sim cuz its just not possible or plausible. no one is going to invent morse code again. it still may even be used like as an ultimate failsafe or seomthin....not really feelin it.
Pussy!
9-Immortal Smash {Stones} On Bones And {Kid'Knees} Ain't Safe Either!
You're Rhymes 'Weak'! I'll Slip This "Fist-in" In Both Sets Of Your Lips And Leave Ob {Tighter}!!!!
kid's knees is kinda forced. the word association is coo, but to no end...funny soundin on first, but not too cool strucure wise. def not feelin the second. i don't even know what typa nasty ref u tryin to make there, but it def didn't hit with me...both sets of lips? if u have to say that, u are tryin to hard i think....be more creative, or don't make it so obvious, u know? the punch wasn't there conceptually anywayz...
Done Deal!
10-Fuck Ten Bars! 'Count Your Strikes' You'll Be Gone In 'Three' To Leave You 'Buried' Like Roots Of A Tree
'F.a.g' Battle Me? With Gay Pride Tees! Ob'll Be {Bearing Straight} The Way He'll Be Standin' Under {Seas!/Sieze}
i don't think the first line ends in a full sentence. you'll be gone/to leave u buried doesn't make a sentence really, regardless of what comes before or after, and the similie is not hard. its under siege btw, u can sieze someone, but who says under seize? seize doesn't mean attack necessarily, but its w/e..gay disses are weak unless u pull some crazy creative ish to make it unique.
Ob
I'm the fierest, man! type to battle a T-Rex and still make it, just to wave and sign boobies for my bestest Fan!
Behead You, Man! Pull the Sword Out & AIM AT ID AT THE EYES, but no it aint a BIOMETRIC SCAN
not really feelin the opener...kinda self promoting....the second line was not much better. sword, biometric scan? can you relate those two? there like from two different times in history, but w/e...is ee the play, but the sword part takes away from it...flow is coo tho...
Lavish in brawl, 90% of the brain required ! ::show of hands:: who thinks I'm Having to Stall?
Loss'll Catch Him So Unawares, Immortal wont know “what Todo” even when told it's the Spanish For All
..aight...braggish start. readers can't respond to you man...kinda weak. surprising...and todo in spanish is pronounced toe-doe, or like toe-tho. to sounds like the word for you in spanish, tú. so the play off todo doesn't really work. i see what u mean, but it didn't play out too well..
the whole world fucking knows ya fucked spitting that played shit against my flawless coke
Rip You and Leave You As Just A Ho? I call this Cosmos my bitch so O'll “wink at the Galaxy” more than A Working Hubble Telescope
still self promoting, uncut coke huh? damn..u get cocky while i was gone? j/p...it just didn't say much about dude..the structure and flow is coo, but lacking punchwise again...strange for u...second line was canibus-ish braggy again, but its a battle, not a shit talking track, u know?
at ease, iteratively bombing this sucker! outclass, and belittle every concept you cover
Erase him with One Bar, then Start with “Divinity Over, See” Brainiacs Make The Link To Jesus Walking On Water
ah, ok...a good bar...coo...elevated vocab that is well used...name play is coo....
so cold, you'll observe his face tear the glove, comebacks you couldn't understand as Noah's wave sent the dove
Open ya Grave, Immortals Shot in the Earth, BAM, Synonymous with the Setting for Shakespeare in Love
LOL@ noah and the dove...good ish there. not seein the cold ref really tho,but feelin the second part. the second line is aight too. creative connection. prolly didn't need all that to get your point across, but it matches the first line in style...aight bar i thought...
You're seeing leadership, refusal to cut up syllables and mispronounce when I'm killing lyricists
Kid, This Shit's like Hanging - I'll Rip Ya Heart Out & Eat It in Front of You - “Chilling, Isn't It?”
hard sounding, clean, flow is coo. its more threatening than dissing, creative..def a diff style than i saw months back from u...
the hardest, of course, the reason you love text, give You direction in hurt more than magnets with sores
Leave In You In Reality Haunted with Death, You'll Even See "The Sungo Read", but I'm not comparing opened emails to African Gods
magnets can't have sores in the real world, so its kinda weak here, especially for u...sun go red was more like u...clean and creative wp...not a super hard punch but good creativity
I was meant to bless ya, Homeboy'll traumatized with his jaw unlocked just like a peerless tenor
no way I'll understand this insolence, the UZI'll "Stick ID in the Mouth" worse than Faking Dental Records
id in the mouth...lol..coo nameplay... not really feelin the simlie on the first, but the second is hard and clean...
How bad do you suck? Got ripped and I didn't use set ups, my rushed keys sick nuff to macerate ya feelings
this Daft kid searching for help, but Against O, it'll only Fall on Deaf Ears like crowd surfing in disabled meetings
lol...first line was not much (u said it yourself tho..lol) outside of a confident tone, but the second was clean. feelin the sim....
this bitch ass aint stopping me, this retard's been Ko'd by every whack thats lost to me
Knocked Out, From UPPERCUTS So Assuredly! You can Find Immortal in Orbit - The Slow ones asking what Roman Mythology
well setup closer...verse coulda used more fire like these last few barz, but its w/e, u finished strong.

Punches-OB: ob came harder here by far. ID may have tried to hard to come deep and complex and missed his opponent
Creativity/Wordplay- Ob: both were fairly creative, but in terms of clean wp Ob outshined ID here. he woulda won this just cuz he had less misses despite the eleveated content..
Multies/Flow- Tie: both were ez to ready and the multies weren't a big part of this. ID had more simple rhymes in general and i think Ob rushed his for some reason...
Personals/nameplays- Ob: stick ID in the mouth, immortal in orbit...those were enough and there were more...
Metaz/similies- Ob: both had em, but ob tied them into his punches better and they were generally more relevant to the battle, although both did have some that didn't go anywhere or didn't hit. quantity wise for quality metaz, ob edges this..

my vote= Obnoxious

not the best battle I've seen, and I know obnoxious can come harder than this. I thought ID did give a decent effort, but u gotta work on those concepts man. keep the barz more simple until u know its all clean and makes sense. that really hurt the verse-too much goin on in most of them to decipher a direct punch with enough ease to make it enjoyable...ob rushed this tho...i'm almost postive. it really didn't get good until the end, and the style seemed more braggish overall than punchy, which is not what I remember....respect to both

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[lyrical thinka]

very close battle... let's see what we come up with...

Flow:ID(only cause his bars were shorter and more understandable)
multies:ob(you definitely got this part hands down!)
punches:tie(you both hit hard on this one)
personals:Id(It was kinda hard but ID got the edge)
wordplay:ob(some one did there homework!)
methphors:Id(no comment...!!)
Creativity-ob(sorry ID... his wordplay was just that creative)
Enjoyment-ob(I would think you boht enjoyed this battle but Im referring to OB's first text on this one)

O/A-Obnoxious... Great battle!

[obnoxious]

5-2 me. Mods please lock this.