T-Stylez
12-02-2006, 03:42 PM
iight no im not gonna judge this hard 'cuz its a first try but here are some tips
-Try to use multi's
-When you making a rap, pick a beat and try to make it flow
-tell a story
-describe things (which is not the biggest issue, but its good if you do)
-try using "like " or "then"things.. example : My flow is colder then santa's crib OR I'm hot like the father of the sun
-and finnaly just keep on rappin and check out others
And oh,... dont rap about fake shit.. like, i have a nine and im gonna pop ya[/i]
lyrical thinka
01-24-2007, 03:31 PM
not to be mean but whats the theme.... and its too short.... lengthen ya bars and add meaning to them....
Harmonic
01-29-2007, 11:27 PM
your rhymes were all over the place man. have you tried rap'n this to a beat? Also try to organize it a little better.