Newbiez right here man help me out!

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I cant rap worth shit
isnt it obvious?
i cant ryme
and i cant time
the beat is off
and the lyrics are all white and fluff
guess im a bitch right?
guess i cant spit tight!
i guess i cant rap cuz im white
i guess my gun dont work when im aiming down the sights
Spin like a tornado with my fists out to knock out your lights
Lets fight
cuz i aint got shit else to do
shit i hit that nigga in his head now hes trying to sue
i aint going to jail have my balls turn blue
you know its true
ii got 2 get them pussys
beat up punks and wussys
This is the end
cuz i cant think of another word besides bend

[T-Stylez]

at least u can practice, PMP

[johnny 5]

either of you ever hear of trshady?

[T-Stylez]

whoz that?

[johnny 5]

prolly this a-hole

[lyrical thinka]

wtih that attitude u might as well leave the rap thing alone...

[aMERiKaZ NiGHTMaRE]

Ok lets see...

NO

This is amatuer stuff, hence in the newbie forum...

Take a look at open mic, DONT DROP THERE, and look at others work... That is what it is all about,

Audio, that shit would be alright, but text is not about shit like that, TEXT is about RAW SKILL... Poets can rap, its all about content and context...

[Cronik239]

fake asssssssssss muhfuckaaa