WEEK 3 - Topical: Rocladii (1-1) vs. T-Stylez(0-0)

[LocoKidd]

Check In Due: Monday, February 12, 11:59 PM
Verses Due: Thursday, February 15, 11:59 PM

ANYONE CAN VOTE ON THIS BATTLE

(If your opponent checks in you must post some sort of verse for a win, if he doesn’t check in, then you win by default.)

Number of bars: Unlimited Bars
Topic: Stuck In A Place Between Heaven and Hell


Ect. Rules:
No Biting,ghost writting,or recylcing

3-0 KO, 4-1 TKO, Or First To 5 Wins.
No Hate/Dick Riding/Unexplained Votes.

crew votes are only allowed if both battlers agree on it.

Voting Rules:

1) Catogories,only with full explinations

Topical:

On Topic:
Depth:
Imagery:
Originality:
Flow:
Multis:
Enjoyment:
Vocab:

Overall Vote:


or

2)Bar by bar breakdowns

Misc:

Title battles will be based on record, attendance, and overall skill. Dnot ask for a title shot.

You are allowed to PM me your verses

[T-Stylez]

lol i dont think im on her lvl yet but aight check

[Rocladii]

aiight chekiin in

[T-Stylez]

nvm

[T-Stylez]

Stuck In A Place Between Heaven and Hell

I did 6 Bars (12 lines) each verse that makes 12 bars (24 lines) + A chorus (which doesnt rhyme cuz its singin)

[Chorus]
This goes Wrong
What to do if everyone lives for luxery
how to Stop this and fight against the bad
This goes wrong
What to do if everyone lives for luxery
Money and gold thats what we aim for
Damn this goes wrong

[Verse 1 = Where it's going]
six billion people stuck-in-this-place-named-earth
im trapped n started fuckin-this-base-since-birth
This base full of haters,-discriminators-n-suckers
all those dictators,-fake-rapcreators-n-fuckers
In my room thinking shall i be gone-suicide-or-not
Walkin trough a ghetto hopin on-this-tonight-a-shot
I'm almost doing that cuz where is-this-hate-going
It also looks like the terrorist biz-is-straight-growing
So i'm stuck with suicide as just-one-choice
I dont take that way, dont wanna hear another bust-gun-voice
After i heard millions of them on Television
I just plug the cables out, as my final Decision

[Chorus]
This goes Wrong
What to do if everyone lives for luxery
how to Stop this and fight against the bad
This goes wrong
What to do if everyone lives for luxery
Money and gold thats what we aim for
Damn this goes wrong

[Verse 2 = Hell or heaven]
Will i go to heaven or hell, it's-the-big-question
I hope it ain't hell cuz i yell-blitz-to-agression (i yell stupid things (blitz thingss) to agression)
They tell me life is a joke, so-play-it-fake
but i just don't wanna make no-gay-mistake
That directly decides whether i go-down-or-above
While i'm tryin to go-crown-n-score-my-love (RAP)
Cuz if i continue rap god might hates me,
But maybe there is a rapheaven for this mc
Like 50 Cent, god please have mercy on-me
And if i do stupid things, please Don't gun-me
but whether its up or down, heaven or hell,
Rap will never hear me say Farewell

[Chorus]
This goes Wrong
What to do if everyone lives for luxery
how to Stop this and fight against the bad
This goes wrong
What to do if everyone lives for luxery
Money and gold thats what we aim for
Damn this goes wrong

[Rocladii]

ok here it isz straiight keyed:


vision groggled,mind fogged with a mixture of HEAT and WHITE LIGHT
feeling sentimental at the same time HATE,wit my feet glued I Might
decide to make a move,but im hypnotized by the little night light
filled with a high fright, i feel the tension in my arms and my knees
im tryna move i hear the jingle of my keys,and i feel a few sweat beads
im stuck without movement,in the middle of my basement doorway
i feel the heat rise from beneath the stairs,and hit against my face
i look away and behind me i see a bright white light blinding my way
my heart beats fast then slow,it cant seem 2 follow my pace
What's Going On?? i yell sharply as my heart begins to race
and a ribbon made of lace seems to float from the WHITE LIGHT 2wards me
it swished under my feet and i had seemed to elevate about four feet
the lace pulled me down the stairs towards the fire brewing at the floor steep
i made a lavish scream and grabbed 4 the walls,of course it all ignored me
the lace then dropped me on the exact middle stair with a huge thud
and disappeared in2 the WHITE LIGHT,i looked back down and there was mud
the stairs below me were filthy and led straight 2 the brewing fire
the ones above were sparkling close to my heart's stewing desire
once again stuck in the midst of beaty and beast,i couldnt even move
PATIENCE i was beginning to lose and then a deck of cards flew
right over the fire and into my hands,and finally a voice spoke up
It said,"Ever since u have woke up the doors have seen hold up
We will play a game to find where your destiny dwells,i wish u well
and we'll see if you belong up high or below in the HEAVENS OR HELLS"
the first card was flipped and it read of a good deed i had done
and i moved up 2 steps,i yelled VICTORY has finally begun
but the next card that was flipped was the day i pulled a gun out on that girl
and i moved 3 steps down,HEAT rose,i didnt want to see that darker world
and the game went on with every anticipated flip,i just wondered
why did it have to be me that barely seen sun,but mostly THUNDER
back and fourth,HOTTER than summer,COOLER than spring,it finally would end
and i was,unfortunately,right on that same step the LACE led me 2 begin
I couldnt understand the midst of me dwelling without an answer 2 questions
between HEAVEN AND HELL,maybe this was a clear message to be a blessin
the difference between happines,wealth,poverty and the gloomy depression
and maybe God and the Devil had only started a competitive session


KEYED LOLZ...dont have time liike dat u guysz kno i can come waii better im jus rushin

[T-Stylez]

It says:
Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 4:30 am Post subject:

Isnt that over time?

[KrAzY]

on mine it says feb 15 7:30...so suck a dick let the votes happen... :microwave:

[KrAzY]

u know im just messin with ya t.. were all good.. heres something from me to you to say im sorry.. :icecream: ....


whoops you can have the cone.. :lol:

[T-Stylez]

yea its all good mayne. Just wanna make sure cuz i got fucked this way to last time. To late while it was on time at my place

[KrAzY]

respected... no more free posts.. UPPIN VOTES..

[KrAzY]

On Topic: tie.. both did very well in this part
Depth: i think r had more depth.
Imagery: i got more imagery from the t
Originality: Tie
Flow: i dont judge this everyone reads different.. so who really knows how the flow is..
Multis: T
Enjoyment: T
Vocab: well used by both.. R TOOK IT THO


just gonna add up the cats.. see where that gets us...
5-3... VOTE TSTYLES...

[T-Stylez]

thanks man 1-0

[LYRICS]

on topic: tie
Depth: r
Imagery: t
Originality: tie
Flow: ehhh maybe just t
Multis: t
Enjoyment: r
Vocab: r
complexity: t
overall: t-stylez nice stuff though from both

[Krazy Fresh]

Topic:Tie
Depth: R
Imagery:T
Originality:R
Flow:Tie
Multis: T
Enjoyment:T
Vocab:R
Overall:T-Stylez Both did good tho..

[T-Stylez]

Its a 3-0 K.O.
Thanks for the votes
N rocladii thanks for the battle