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$killZ
02-14-2007, 06:54 PM
"You know what i mean??
I didnt wanna have to do this to R@g3..."




You feelin like akon, i seen the "TWINKLE" in this bitches eyes /
Then i steadly focus, he steadly stressess and i see the "WRINKLE" on his Forhead like old age problems /

If you had a click i woulda DIPPED YA SET (Dip Set) into gravy /
Then letchu get annorexic cause you diein from H.I.V. /

Have you blowin balloons while im feelin em up cuz they big like C-CUP /
Rub you over my toast bitch, rub into my buttercup /

Where's ya nine, u pop em and sell drugs right? Fuck naw! /
You aint no Cereal Killa (serial killa) /

You aint got no street cred cause real thugs are on the corner /
Bitch, i'll give you pain (die slow) ill eat popcorn while you suffer /

I'm sittin on the comp tryna up my skills but you sittin cause you bored /
After the aftermath you gonna have to pray to the good lord /

Ima twist you off the top like bottle caps /
Then you can hire a ghost writer then we'll think you inproove flowin on ya raps /

Ima plug you into the back like computer chips /
Then disconnect you from the computer like the connection slips (connection cut off)

I'm a threat like holdin a hand grenade /
Cause when i blow up the explosion might cause a death parade /



"Yeah.. You wanna go back and forth, shit ill battle you..
Whatever you wanna do.. It's all good homeboi..
Do what you gotta do naw mean?"

R@g3
02-14-2007, 07:22 PM
fall ya ass back ya whack fam...

$killZ
02-14-2007, 07:31 PM
get at me then bitch.. lets see whatchu got..

SevenDayTheory
02-14-2007, 11:43 PM
that shit is wacker the wack, u make wack look good dog... dayme.. that shit is rank

$killZ
02-15-2007, 09:37 AM
Seven Day Theory.. FUCK YOU!
why dont u get at me you little bitch 8)

SevenDayTheory
02-15-2007, 03:56 PM
coz i dont wanna waste my time... lol nah fair enough dog...

ummm.... I'll keep it contructive hey:

* you need to have the same bar lengths (Same ammount of cylables is a good start)
* Structure you bars accordinly
* Use multis and metaphors


Ima twist you off the top like bottle caps /
Then you can hire a ghost writer then we'll think you inproove flowin on ya raps /

thats where u sucked most.. the lenghts way off and the only caps and raps rhymed...

* finally you had some okay punches dog but you need to use them right.. its like making a fist and tapping the bitch on the arm.. slam the cu.nt let him know it yeah...



ps. fuck u to! :P

Munchy
02-15-2007, 08:57 PM
Instead of telling him how shit he is? why dont you use your fuckin lyrics
jesus christ nigga!, everyone does a whack drop now n again. So put an 'ill' one there to help them get better.

$killZ
02-16-2007, 03:09 PM
thanks for the feed bruh. 8)

~Yung_Money~
02-16-2007, 03:33 PM
nuff said dis was weak, and most of da bars didnt even rhyme, slow ya roll noo-b, but on da real keep workin on it and elevate

R@g3
02-17-2007, 11:39 AM
nuff said...

B.N.G
02-18-2007, 02:01 PM
coz i dont wanna waste my time... lol nah fair enough dog...

ummm.... I'll keep it contructive hey:

* you need to have the same bar lengths (Same ammount of cylables is a good start)
* Structure you bars accordinly
* Use multis and metaphors


Ima twist you off the top like bottle caps /
Then you can hire a ghost writer then we'll think you inproove flowin on ya raps /

thats where u sucked most.. the lenghts way off and the only caps and raps rhymed...

* finally you had some okay punches dog but you need to use them right.. its like making a fist and tapping the bitch on the arm.. slam the cu.nt let him know it yeah...



ps. fuck u to! :P
lmao
anyway he wont understand any thing u said to him , everyone tried to give him a feedback , but he doesnt even care about it
ID loooooooool

SevenDayTheory
02-18-2007, 10:03 PM
lmao yeah.. but hey... you gotta start somewhere dog.

Munchy
02-18-2007, 10:30 PM
Some of his lines were on a song from ''Diabolic'' & ''Immortal Technique''
Named ''Jedi Mind Tricks'' listen n see

dbrock
02-20-2007, 02:35 PM
coz i dont wanna waste my time... lol nah fair enough dog...

ummm.... I'll keep it contructive hey:

* you need to have the same bar lengths (Same ammount of cylables is a good start)
* Structure you bars accordinly
* Use multis and metaphors


Ima twist you off the top like bottle caps /
Then you can hire a ghost writer then we'll think you inproove flowin on ya raps /

thats where u sucked most.. the lenghts way off and the only caps and raps rhymed...

The reason hes off here is because he took this line from diabloic and imortal teqs diss to the agency, fucking pussy


* finally you had some okay punches dog but you need to use them right.. its like making a fist and tapping the bitch on the arm.. slam the cu.nt let him know it yeah...



ps. fuck u to! :P

dbrock
02-20-2007, 02:38 PM
Some of his lines were on a song from ''Diabolic'' & ''Immortal Technique''
Named ''Jedi Mind Tricks'' listen n see

How weird is that nigga, i posted my post before i seen yours then i looked at mine to see if it came out right and u called the same thing... hahha nice look son...

Muphaser
02-20-2007, 02:52 PM
Some of his lines were on a song from ''Diabolic'' & ''Immortal Technique''
Named ''Jedi Mind Tricks'' listen n see

Werd - hopefully there won't be any action done unto you