Week 4 Topical: GTech (2-0) - Antic (3-0) *HW Playoff*

[Dex Aspen]

TOPICAL DATES ARE DIFFERENT THEN THE SIGN IN.TAKE NOTE.




Check In Due: Thursday, February 22, 11:59 PM
Verses Due: Sunday, February 25, 11:59 PM

ANYONE CAN VOTE ON THIS BATTLE

(If your opponent checks in you must post some sort of verse for a win, if he doesn’t check in, then you win by default.)

Number of bars: Unlimited Bars
Topic: Drug Deal Gone Violently Wrong


Ect. Rules:
No Biting,ghost writting,or recylcing

3-0 KO, 4-1 TKO, Or First To 5 Wins.
No Hate/Dick Riding/Unexplained Votes.

crew votes are only allowed if both battlers agree on it.

Voting Rules:

1) Catogories,only with full explinations

Topical:

On Topic:
Depth:
Imagery:
Originality:
Flow:
Multis:
Enjoyment:
Vocab:

Overall Vote:


or

2)Bar by bar breakdowns

Misc:

Title battles will be based on record, attendance, and overall skill. Do not ask for a title shot.

You are allowed to PM me your verses


*WINNER OF THIS ROUND ADVANCES TO HEAVYWEIGHT FINAL NEXT WEEK*

[Antic]

Check...cool topic.

[GTech]

Word.. Check and Good Luck

[Antic]

Hey hey, I'ma drop late tonight, probably right at the deadline...got some stuff goin' on...if I can't, I willl drop tomorrow morning, if that's cool...if not, I'll make it happen tonight.

[GTech]

A'ight sounds good to me... but if it aint by morning, then it should be considered a no-show... here's my drop:

An awakening resonance sound enters my eardrum, as my conscious activates
Alarm clock illustrates 7 am, so I modernize and renovate, my sudden position
Rubbing my eyes with invariable movement, attempt to stand, my back aint straight
With strains I receive back problems as I aint healthy with empty stomach nutrition
As I get up to my hygienic daily procedures, the phone rings as im interrupted
I pick up the phone and answer, and for a slight moment I hear nothing
Then I perceive the sound of one my closest homies, Anthony, sounding concerned
The precise minute he said my name my estimated guesses rounded disturbed
He mentions Richie being kidnapped, from what he has heard
A sudden shock impulse struck me and converted to a frown with my nerves
I said I would meet with him, so I hung up the phone and dismounted my words
I went bizzirk, I was agitated, my conscience focused for temper if u counted the urge
Departed from my residence, j-walked across the street and mounted from a curb
Intervened with my crew, reputation of illegal actions
Hidden features equipped, provided needles in packets
The civilians and innocent peoples couldn’t imagine
How our status situated on neglecting compassion
Mesmerized by the green, but we were still the most dangerous to sally
Constantly the ones to spark the valleys and leaving cadavers in dark alleys
Our clique leader’s cell phone rung while we were discussing
On how we’re gonna convene with the enemy to distribute percussions
The leader hung up his phone, events like this was seldom
He told us we need deliver a grand portion of drugs, but weren’t gonna sell em’
Without any exceptions like a snake equipped with venom
He told us if we refuse then their would take Richie and kill em’
In order for us to save him, it had to be done and we couldn’t stop it
So that night we accumulated the yeyo and brought guns in our pockets…

As the crew approached the given destination, we entered the facilities
We were lead by a sentinel who led us to a room in tranquility
Momentarily, a man in a black suite enters the room with high artillery armed men
Who brought someone with a long bag over their head
As he was twitching, they revealed him, Richie, who was kidnapped from home
He was family to us, we were relieved so without hesitation we approached
As the guards pointed their guns at us, the man in the black suite ceased our relief
He asked for the yeyo primarily, and he’ll release him in peace
So as we decided to head for our van, obtaining their part of the deal and alignment
Before our next proceeding step, from outside we hear the sound of sirens
The man in the black suite, made it conspicuously clear,
Our friend would die if the anyone else especially the 5-0 would interfere
We argued about the incident on how it was unforeseen
And how we never touched a dial by any means
As we paid attention to the breakings, of the police breaking inside
We quickly glimpse at Richie that’s still tied up but still alive
As the man points a gun to Richie, police enter, the protection dies just when he said
“Good bye” then blood gushes through the other side of his head…




































I wake up!
Subdivisions of damp moist sweat on my head, I realize it was a dream off the dome
As I lay my two feet on the ground my mind state is interrupted by the telephone
My sweaty palms grips the tone, I respond quickly
As I hear another concerned voice, and I couldn’t believe it…
Differentiating the resonance of Richie, I had a relieved face as soon as I perceived it
I had entered the stages of enchantment and delight, my phases had achieved it
But the celebration wasn’t allocated, Richie’s voice, distressed with untenanted gaps
The information he had propelled, left my spirit broken and lapsed
Perhaps jubilation wasn’t for the sinned, there was no token in tact
When to me, Richie’s rebirth essence’s voice informed me Anthony was kidnapped
And informed me that we had to deliver some drugs, but not sell em’
And he told me if events would dismantle they would kill em’
As this left my confidence beaten and the nightmare had repeated without hoping
I was going through another nightmare with my eyes wide open
After I hung up the phone, I had instantly realized outta hand
When vacating my residence I had receive another chance
Of giving both my friends, life to the prophecy
I held this ideology wrapped with my own senses of terminology
With rejecting the options of another drug deal gone violently wrong, you can see
I took this second chance while nothing was stopping me…

Summary

The story is based on a guy named Jamal Johnson who’s in a gang that deals drugs and murders people. So he wakes up, and his phone rings. So he answers it. It’s one of his close homeboys, Anthony. So he says that another close friend, Richie, was kidnapped from another gang. And they’re head leader gave them a deal. If they gave him drugs, he’ll release Richie in peace. So they gather up the drugs, and go to the requested destination where Richie was kidnapped. They finally meet with him and see Richie. As they try to approach him, the man who kidnapped Richie asks for the drugs. So they go to their van to get em’ and then suddenly the cops come (but Jamal in his crew never called them). As the cops break in, the head leader of the opposite gang gets angry and without sensibility, he shoots Richie in the head as he instantly dies. Then afterwards, Jamal wakes up. As he’s relieved of realizing it was a dream, the phone rings once again. It’s Richie, and he couldn’t be happier. But suddenly Jamal’s celebration ceases as Richie tells him Anthony gets kidnapped. And once again, they have to deliver drugs and if they refuse, then they’ll kill Anthony. As Jamal is hangs up the phone to meet with Anthony, he realizes he won’t make the same mistake he did with Richie in his dream. So he takes this opportunity as another chance. And it ends from there…

[Dex Aspen]

Antic-

goddammit.....you got till noon on the 26th.PM me your verse.



-{A}-:out

[Dex Aspen]

* Antic's verse*



..........WASTE OF SPACE............


..But I Ain't Tha Smartest Cat Or Tha Hardest Man
Just A 1.5 GPA Waste-Of-Space Rockin' A Starter Cap...
..Vocab Of A Garbage Bag, But What I'm Tellin' I'm Livin'
Stupid Weed Fiend Wit A Passion For Sellin' And Givin'!!!



..Three Raps On The Door But There Weren't No Answer
Dime Bag In Hand, Man I WIsh This Dick Were Faster...
..I'm Exposed Out Here In Broad Daylight And It's Cold
Fuckin' Cold Man, I Gotta Get This Shit Sold...
..Before My Fingers Fall Off And My Toes Go Numb
Desperate For Cash, Dealin' In Daylight's Soooo Dumb...
..But Yall Don't Know That Unless You've Soooold Some,
Never Hung Wit Losers And Addicts Unless You Knooow Some...
..So In Retrospect, I 'See Both Sides' Like Metro "Sex,ual" Know
What I'm Sayin'? Understand These Moves I'm Makin'?...
..But Back To This Porch, This Hoth-Planet Weather
Silly Dime Bag In Hand, Tryin' To Stack Cheddar...
..Knock Again, Still No Answer, I Ponder Tha Meaning
I Ask Myself, "Why Want Drugs, But Refuse Tha Meeting?...
..But The Cold In This Windy City Gits Me Busy
No Dime Bag Sale Worth This Weather This Shitty...



..But I Ain't Tha Smartest Cat Or Tha Hardest Man
Just A 1.5 GPA Waste-Of-Space Rockin' A Starter Cap...
..Vocab Of A Garbage Bag, But What I'm Tellin' I'm Livin'
Stupid Weed Fiend Wit A Passion For Sellin' And Givin'!!!



..I Digress, Lemme Try Tha Back Door, Maybe That'll Work
Go To The Back Gate To Attempt To Hassle Jerk...
..But Fuck, Of Course, The Gate's Locked
But I Won't Be Stopped, Stuck In The Same Spot...
..I See Jordan In My Mental, I'll Be Like Mike,
Smash The Vertical Challenge, Feel The Lime Light...
..I Jumped From the Freethrow Line, Or Rather The Street
Over The Fence, Into The Yard Wit A Patter Of Feet...
..Dust Off, And Look Into The Eyes Of This Guy's Pitbull
Sellin' This Dime Bag? Now Is The Shit Cool?
..In A Flash I Remember The Stash
Fed It To Tha Pit, Cuz This Cold December Is Ass...
..Walked Through The Yard Then Remembered The Cash
Remembered Tha Goal, Remembered Tha Man...


..But I Ain't Tha Smartest Cat Or Tha Hardest Man
Just A 1.5 GPA Waste-Of-Space Rockin' A Starter Cap...
..Vocab Of A Garbage Bag, But What I'm Tellin' I'm Livin'
Stupid Weed Fiend Wit A Passion For Sellin' And Givin'!!!..



..Grabbed What Was Left Of The Bag
Stepped Over Tha Lazy Pit, And Crept Up The Back...
..But The Door Opened Before I Could Knock
Out Stepped The Guy Dressed As A Cop...
..That's Odd, I Thought, I Don't Sell To Tha Po
I Maybe Dumb, But He Didn't Have Ta Tell Me To Go...
..Acrobatic, Matrix-Leaning, Spidey Reflexes In Action
Dodged Tha Cop's Lunge In Tha Yard I'm Trapped In...
..Smashed In The Fence Cartoon-Style Like I Left The Imprint
Adult Dealer Wit Tha Mind Of An Infant...
..Tha Cold Turns To Hot As I Sweat From Runnin'
Thoughts Drift To Jail, But It Ain't Gon Be My Ass They Pumpin'...
..Held On To Hope Like I'd Have To Hold On To The Soap
I Maybe Broke But Not Enough For A Poke...
..Hurdlin' Trash Cans, Bums, And Dodgin' Tha Sluts
No Dime Bag's Worth Gettin' Cock In Tha Butt...
..I Escaped This Time, But I Doubt I'll Learn
Forget Tha Cold Kid! It's Time For A Burn...
..Pulled A Blunt Out From My Pocket And Lit It
That's When I Thought Of This Rhyme, Conceived It And Spit It, Cuz......


...I Ain't Tha Smartest Cat Or Tha Hardest Man
Just A 1.5 GPA Waste-Of-Space Rockin' A Starter Cap...
..Vocab Of A Garbage Bag, But What I'm Tellin' I'm Livin'
Stupid Weed Fiend Wit A Passion For Sellin' And Givin'!!!


Fin.

[Anesthetic]

On Topic: Tie
Depth: GTech
Imagery: Antic
Originality: Tie
Flow: Antic
Multis: Ehhhh. Saw a few from Antic, so him, cuz GTech's was just straight bar styled.
Enjoyment: Tie.
Vocab: GTech. You're trying WAY too hard. Tone down and quit jocking my style.


Overall Vote: Goes to Antic.

[MANE]

On Topic: Antic..The story flowed well.
Depth: G tech
Imagery: Antic..The way you wrote it gave a slight comic relief and cartoonish feeling.
Originality: Antic
Flow: Antic..For the most part you didn't miss a beat..G-tech was a little hard to follow.
Multis: Antic
Enjoyment: Antic
Vocab: G tech..Although, like annie said, i think the vocab is a bit forced. You should focus on using your vast vocabulary to create concise lines that don't get the reader drifting off into different directions..You feel me?

Overall Vote: Antic..Solid verse.

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[[King_Mc]]

On Topic: G
Depth: A
Imagery: G
Originality: G
Flow: A
Multis: A
Enjoyment: G
Vocab: TIE

Overall Vote: close battle, but Tech just came harder in my eyes.. real nice tho..

2-1

[GTech]

I aint gettin dis shit with tha multis... maybe ive gone blind like LYrics...

thx for tha vote king...

2-1

[Evoligion]

On Topic: Tie .. Both sides followed through well.
Depth: GTech
Imagery: Antic .. I liked the imagery in this, very good.
Originality: Tie .. Both brought it.
Flow: Antic
Multis: Tie .. Both had 'em and used them well.
Enjoyment: Tie
Vocab: GTech .. Yeah, the vocab made it a little hard to follow, but didn't stop it from being a good ass read.

Overall Vote: GTech

Very good battle .. Really almost too close to call, but I seen it as GTech edging this one out. His Depth in his verse was very nice, but on the other hand you have Antic's imagery, so it equaled each other out, so it literally came down to the climax, and GTech pulled it out from there ... other than that, it was virtually equal. Both came great, and a great battle, keep it up ya'll.

[Dex Aspen]

Votes 2-2:Tied


...uppin for votes.HW Playoff.




-{A}-:out

[GTech]

VOTE UP

2-2

[Antic]

2-2, uppin.

[GTech]

sshit...

BUMP

[DiMe™]

Nice Shit From Both CAts....
Nice Topic And Both Cats Took Advantage Of It....


On Topic - TIE
Depth - [b]GTech [Reall detailed with crazy vocab, nice shit]
Flow - Antic [Kinda made it hard for GTech having so many sylablles in his lines because of the vocab]
Multies - TIE [Both used them well and hardly any of them were overly forced]
Imagery - Antic [That story was sick, specially bout the cop comming out the back door an shit]
Originallity - TIE
Vocabulary - [b]GTech [Was crazy, maybe a lil to much though]
Enjoyment - Antic [Just liked how he told his story]

Overall Vote = Antic


Antic = 3 Catergories
GTech = 2 Catergories


Close Battle... Nice Drops From Both


3-2 Antics Way

[GTech]

Apreciate the vote Dime.. props..

3-2 Antic

[DiLLi R]

On Topic: TIE
Depth: GTech
Imagery: GTech
Originality: GTech
Flow: Antic
Multis: Antic (GTech had some two, but I found them a bit hard to read.)
Enjoyment: TIE
Vocab: GTech

Overall Vote: GTech

No hate of course to Antic. You were good, you put it down in the real world, GTech put it down in emotion.

p3ac3

[Antic]

3-3, it'll be interesting to see who takes it.

[Dex Aspen]

...I wish people would vote on this quicker.This is the one I've been checking on the most.




-{A}-:out

[GTech]

lol agreed Antic. Let the best man win.

Thx for tha vote Dilli..

3-3

[Red Tha Baron]

On Topic: Tied, both of you didnt stray far from the topic
Depth: G, was alot more deeper than antics was IMO
Imagery: Tied, it was pretty close in this cat...to close to call
Originality: G
Flow: A, short bars & even if both had multies...G's was stretched & was doin some ABAB rhyme scheme that honestly had no flow
Multis: A, better use of them.
Enjoyment: G, this was gonna be a tie, but G's twist at the ending was really dope. so he gets this cat
Vocab: G, jus a more advanced vocab

Overall Vote: Gtech, very close battle here...

[GTech]

4-3..

thx for tha vote man, apreciate it a lot.

[Shoalin]

On Topic: Both Did This nicely
Depth: GTech
Imagery: GTech
Originality: GTech
Flow: Antic
Multis: Antic
Enjoyment: TIE
Vocab: GTech

Overall Vote: GTech
5-3
LOCKED!