first rhyme -help appreciated

[dkid352]

i know it's kinda short and it's not really done yet but let me know what you think.


sometimes i just sit back and think
i've got some real big dreams of fucking doing big things
wanna flip a couple bricks, fill up my wallet up with cheese
and never spend another dollar to smoke the finest trees
i wanna live that life bitch, the fucking street dream
wanna fill my pockets up with 100 shiny keys
to 100 shiny cars that you bitches never seen
take em to the highway morph into the gingerbread man
i'll be swervin past the cops screaming catch me if your can
put the pedal to the floor and they'll never see me again
sorry but that's how i do mr. police man
then i'll make a quick stop at my bitches house
get down to buissiness stuff my dick in her mouth
wiggle it around and stir up her brains
but it don't really matter she's already insane
pull my dick out, now i'm done, okay
know what's next so i wont delay
meet up with my boy and get a bag of that yay
cuz you know he got the whitest fucking powder cocaine
cut up a few lines put the straw up to my nose
might as well call me hoover while im inhaling that blow
bitch i stay coked up all day and nite
see my pupils shrink up like mosquito bites
step back my flows so hot i just might ingite
the girls ask me if i belive in love at first sight
if i get crunk enough tonite bitch i just might

[~Yung_Money~]

it was aight, but rap isnt always about drugs, money, and bein a gangsta, sometimes dat happens to be part of da life but you dont have to rap about it

try findin some better topics to spit about, up ya vocab, and peep some of da tutorials here in da 101 forum

[dkid352]

alright thanks, will do