Week 5 Topical: X (0-2) vs !FEren (0-0)

[Dex Aspen]

TOPICAL DATES ARE DIFFERENT THEN THE SIGN IN.TAKE NOTE.




Check In Due: Monday, March 12th, 11:59 PM
Verses Due: Wednesday, March 14, 11:59 PM

ANYONE CAN VOTE ON THIS BATTLE

(If your opponent checks in you must post some sort of verse for a win, if he doesn’t check in, then you win by default.)

Number of bars: Unlimited Bars
Topic:Walter Payton


Ect. Rules:
No Biting,ghost writting,or recylcing

3-0 KO, 4-1 TKO, Or First To 5 Wins.
No Hate/Dick Riding/Unexplained Votes.

crew votes are only allowed if both battlers agree on it.

Voting Rules:

1) Catogories,only with full explinations

Topical:

On Topic:
Depth:
Imagery:
Originality:
Flow:
Multis:
Enjoyment:
Vocab:

Overall Vote:


or

2)Bar by bar breakdowns

Misc:

Title battles will be based on record, attendance, and overall skill. Do not ask for a title shot.

You are allowed to PM me your verses

[!FEren]

Chek.

unlimited bars.. wow..okay..

[!FEren]

Uhmm I Think The Deadline is Pretty Soon..
First Topical
Interestin Topic I Guess,
Here I Go..


As I Lay In Bed At Night And I Stay Awake
Thinkin, Dreamin About One Of The Games Greats
Almost Freakin Out Cause He Stays In My Mind
On The Verge Of Screamin Out, I Say, Why Oh Why
I Can See The Plays He Ran Playin Twenty Times In My Head
I Can See Him With Him Teammates Very Excited To Death
He's Just Found Out He's At The Top For his Rushing Records
And Because of This, You Got Me Wondering Just What For
God Has Strange Methods, He Knows All But Plays Us For Fools
Maybe Insain Head Or, Life Is Just A Game And We Lost All The Rules
Instead Of Takin A Junkie Shootin Up Behind The Street
He'll Take A Man Worthy Of Worship, Hall Of Famer, 1993
This Man Was A Legend, And Then He Went
This Superhero Was Dead Then and No Millenium
Go To One Of His Games Expierience Magic
Wasnt Just Fear and Tradgic, But It's Weird...Imagine.
One Minute Sold Out Game, Crowd Chanting Your Name
Couple Years Later By Yourself, Thinkin How It Became

All White, Silence, Hospital Bed Waiting For An Answer
Slight Ringing Of Sirens, "Sorry Mr. Payton You Have Cancer"
And As Soon As The Sentence Stops, All Is Unheard
As Soon As The Last Breath Has Dropped,Small Light Blurred
Life Flashes, Career Records, Milestones and Players of The Year
This Light Smashes, Careers Gone, Now Alone Prayin With Fear
If Only It Could Happen That SomeOne Can Explain His Death To Me
A Man, The Best I've Seen, Now The Only Words People Talk Is Rest In Peace
TombStone Surrounded With Flowers, A Lotta Love, All For His Heart
A Wish To Everyone, Once Was Way Up Now Just a Falling Star
Payton's Accomplishments Heard More Than Far, Nine Pro Bowls Aint Easy
Can You Try Imagine This.. WOW.. One Hundred And Twenty Five T.D's
Like His Nine Pro Bowls, Every Time My Eyes Close
This Man Will Always Be Remembered, While I Lye and Grow Cold
His Skill, Consistency, So Loyal To His Fans
He'd Kill, His Shit Could Be Like Oil to The Man
SO Valuable Everyone Wanted a Say Over Him
The Only Say Now Is Rest In Peice Walter Payton

Maybe Dead To Some But,Hardly Ever Wonder What Its Hurtin For
Everyone Will Remember, The Chicago Bear, Amazing Number Thirty Four

The End

[!FEren]

Anyone gonna Vote or What?

[DiLLi R]

Damn...I Didn't Even Need To Read All Of X's Before I Knew That !FEren's Was Better. But I'll Read It Anyways...



On Topic: Tie
Depth: !FEren
Imagery: Tie
Originality: !FEren
Flow: !FEren
Multis: X
Enjoyment: Tie
Vocab: Tie

Overall Vote: !FEren (No Offence To X Of Course, But I Felt That Him Taking More Bars On His Verse)

P34C3 0U7!

[DiMe™]

nice depth and imagery by feren, but also sick multis and flow from X, close battle,

Heres how i saw it

On Topic - TIE
Depth - Feren
Imagery - Feren [More bars helped to tell the story better]
Flow - X
Multies - X
Creativity - Feren
Enjoyment - TIE [enjoyed the way X's verse just flowed straight out with his multies but Ferens story was also sick]
Vocab - Feren


Overall Vote = Feren


Sick Closer Man
Maybe Dead To Some But,Hardly Ever Wonder What Its Hurtin For
Everyone Will Remember, The Chicago Bear, Amazing Number Thirty Four

[!FEren]

get ready for ya first loss

:wink: Uppn For Tha KO :D

[The Chozen One 13]

On Topic: Tie
Depth: !FEren
Imagery: Tie
Originality: !FEren
Flow: !FEren
Multis: X
Enjoyment: Tie
Vocab: Tie

o/a:iferen (x was kind of simple) i like the closer iferen
since iferen had longer bars it gave him a edge

[!FEren]

First Topical
First Drop In RDTL
First KO in RDTL
First Win in RDTL

I'ma do this more often :lol:

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